Monday, 31 August 2015


WALT create our own a Myth / legend 

Once in a planet far far away. There was a fish-man named Bob. He was able to breath under water ,swim super fast and turn his legs into a tail.bob was living on a tiny island on a planet that was named Aqualandia. All it was, was tons and tons of water. There was another island with a lady on it but she can't swim. That's obviously a problem. Bob totally has to go save Wendy he could see her but nearly. So he swam to the island but half way through he saw piranhas, jellyfish and 5 great white sharks at least 20 foot long. The jellyfish swimming so fast he could bearly see them piranhas were to but the Sharks were just circling him. He knew he was a goner but he remembered about a knife in his secret pocket  he grabbed it out but it slipped and stabbed a piranha he quickly grabbed it from the piranha strait away a jellyfish was beside he swiped it with the knife they were coming in like lightning he swiped here there suddenly when all of them were dead the sharks focused on Bob, he swiped them he went to the island and rescued Wendy. He took her to his secret liar he put her into his rocket and there she went.

Co-constructed SC:

keep your writing in order:
beginning, middle and end
make sure you have your plan
put it into your own words
use more interesting words, 
time connectives - suddenly, later, unexpectedly, meanwhile, next minute...after that
proof read your writing
highlighter strategy

Editing your story is a very important  - Make sure you read it through carefully and check:
Will your story make sense to your reader and will it interest them?
Have you given a satisfactory ending?
Is your spelling correct?
Make sure you have used a range of punctuation ,  .  !  “  “  ?  (  ) 
 Start a new paragraph for:
•A change of time, e.g. Early the next morning…
•A change of place e.g. On the other side of the mountain stood…
•A change of action e.g. At that moment the lights went out.
•A change of character e.g. Unexpectedly, Dr Townley rounded the corner.

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