Thursday, 31 July 2014

Hiwi the kiwi writing

WALT: persuade 

Task: to write a persuasive piece of writing about fishing for the future 


My dad and I were down to the beach with our fishing rods. It was 4:30 I the morning because that's when the fish are snapping. We got into the boat and stuck the fish ruler on the side. I put my life jacket on. " dad put that life jacket on" I said. "Fine" Dad said. Then we're off. We stopped and casted our fishing lines out. Sraight away I caught a fish and it was huge I threw it back. "Why did you do that ?" dad said. Then a huge wave got us and the boat flipped. I was bobbing up and down and then I saw the can with the flares in it. I dived under the water and got it and  got the beacon out and I shot the fire rocket and the plane came over and then the orange smoke and the goes back. Then a speed boat comes with the engine going vrooooooom then he picked me up then dad was screaming heeeelp and we picked him up and we got back to shoore. " what a day" I said.

Evaluation: I think I could work on having more action


Feed back:  

Cooper I think you did a good job but you could describe it a little more. So out of 10 I give you a 8/10.

Wednesday, 2 July 2014

Set smart goals

WALT: Set SMART goals

Task: 
S.M.A.R.T. means Specific, Measurable, Attainable, Realistic and Time-sensitive.
Specific: Don’t be vague. What exactly do you want?
Measurable: Quantify your goal. How will you know if you’ve achieved it or not?
Attainable: Be honest with yourself about what you can reasonably accomplish at this point in your life, taking into consideration your current responsibilities.
Realistic: It’s got to be doable, real and practical.
Time: Associate a time frame with each goal. When should you complete the goal?

Criteria: I can write 4 learning goals that are
***Self Assessment I think I could work on writing
Peer Comment
Specific;
Measurable;
Attainable;
Realistic;
Time Sensitive.
Name:
Overall, how well do you think your learning partner has done?

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Comment: 
My writing goal is to... my goal by my latest goals have been to use subject specific vocabulary to support meaning and include detail that supports my main points
The reason I have decided to focus on this goal is because...I need to add more detail and vocabulary
I will accomplish This by adding more detail

My reading goal is to...my goal by my next goal is to make text-text connections between genres with similar themes
The reason I have decided to focus on this goal is because...I need to work on being able to get the text after a couple of times
I will accomplish I will read every night

My maths goal is to... my goal by I can gain quicker recall of the times tables I don't know instantly 
The reason I have decided to focus on this goal is because... I need to learn facts that 
I will accomplish  I will right down sums that I don't know instantly